This man doesn't know how to write for Fringe. At times the characters don't seem like themselves(Olivia, in particular) and there are random mistakes, things Fringe never does(like a sign reading "Olivia's apartment building", etc.), so yes, let's stick with the original writers.
it's not too good, no. the characters are definitely not like the ones we know. but it's cool that he wrote about the stepfather, i wish we had seen him come back!
Don't eat me but I happen to like that he wrote this... And just because the characters seem a little out of place doesn't mean they are OOC... That's what stories are for. They don't have to be exact... At least in my opinion. He's just borrowing them... Anyways, I like what he's written.
Yeah I'm a dozen pages into it and already the way Olivia is written here is far too emotional. Especially seeing as in this current timeline she's even less emotional than ever.
About those more delicate ways of saying something. You should read the script for Pilot by Abrams himself (which is available on the internet for free). It`s even more shall we say "rude"? The incident on the plane contains sentences like
"Troubled (Richard Steig) keeps going, steadying himself on the seat backs as he moves –- the Flight Attendant gaining. Practically the only light we get now is from the WILD LIGHTNING and SEAT BELT lights -– and finally she catches up to him -– reaches out, grabs his shoulder -– and she turns him toward her -– toward us -– AND HIS FACE IS A THING OF HORROR: HIS FLESH LIQUIFYING – FUCKING MELTING – HIS EYES BALLOONED IN UTTER FEAR –- and the Flight Attendant’s eyes go wide in a terrifying PRE-SCREAM GASP as Troubled GRABS HER ARM –- and she SCREAMS BLOODY FUCKING MURDER --"
or
"The Flight Attendant runs past INDIAN MAN -– WHOSE FACE IS FUCKING MELTING NOW TOO – HE’S LOSING HIS MIND -– LOOKING AT HIS HANDS – THE FLESH PAINFULLY LIQUIFYING!"
When Olivia (Warren - in the original script) meets Nina for the first time and we all remember how Olivia was not buying Nina`s story or whatever, there`s a sentence "and she (Olivia) doesn`t fucking trust her (Nina)."
So maybe it`s a common practise to put it like that in the script. I wouldn`t do that but someone maybe (and obviously) would. I don`t know. When I see something like that in the script I find it lame and it kinda makes the script cheap or immature or I don`t know how to put it (English is not my native language so excuse me for lack of words :-D)
He makes such spectacular trailers/promos, maybe he could just... keep doing that. Not to say that this is bad, I know I couldn't do any better, but it just seems like trailers are his true calling.
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Is this Fan-Fic?
ReplyDeleteYep, Ari Margolis is the man who creates the Fringe trailers, he has written his own episode of Fringe.
ReplyDeleteAhh ok then.
ReplyDeleteA higher grade of FanFic I guess maybe? XD
ReplyDeleteRegardless I'm not a fan... I hold to the George RR Martin stance on FanFic... it's bad.
Those were my thoughts too. But if I find myself not being able to sleep I might just crack this open. LOL!
ReplyDeleteThis man doesn't know how to write for Fringe. At times the characters don't seem like themselves(Olivia, in particular) and there are random mistakes, things Fringe never does(like a sign reading "Olivia's apartment building", etc.), so yes, let's stick with the original writers.
ReplyDeleteNot to mention that Olivia's Stepdad is known as Olivia's stepdad. or was it Step-Father. At any rate couldn't he come up with a name.
ReplyDeleteit's not too good, no. the characters are definitely not like the ones we know. but it's cool that he wrote about the stepfather, i wish we had seen him come back!
ReplyDeleteI know this is probably not the place for it but I CAN'T see the Google+ button ;( Is it just me or is it from the site?
ReplyDeleteIt should be under the Title of the Post in the little grey box.
ReplyDeleteWe moved it last night
Thanks, but not really interested.
ReplyDeleteDon't eat me but I happen to like that he wrote this... And just because the characters seem a little out of place doesn't mean they are OOC... That's what stories are for. They don't have to be exact... At least in my opinion. He's just borrowing them... Anyways, I like what he's written.
ReplyDeletePretty intense
ReplyDeleteNot what I was expecting... Nice, but not current, so thanks but no thanks.
ReplyDeleteCan't they film this???
ReplyDeleteI love this script~ Olivia collapses into broyles arms wow!!!!!
sorry, I just love olivia /broyles moments
Yeah I'm a dozen pages into it and already the way Olivia is written here is far too emotional. Especially seeing as in this current timeline she's even less emotional than ever.
ReplyDeleteThat wasn't too bad though.
ReplyDeleteEuhm... I dunno what to say... *cough* It's nice....
ReplyDeleteDoes enyone know if Aris Margolis is Greek???
ReplyDeleteWikipedia might.
ReplyDeleteIt doesn't say anything! The name and the surname is definitely Greek! But he might born in USA from Greek parents!
ReplyDeleteAbout those more delicate ways of saying something. You should read the script for Pilot by Abrams himself (which is available on the internet for free). It`s even more shall we say "rude"? The incident on the plane contains sentences like
ReplyDelete"Troubled (Richard Steig) keeps going, steadying himself on the seat backs as
he moves –- the Flight Attendant gaining. Practically the
only light we get now is from the WILD LIGHTNING and SEAT
BELT lights -– and finally she catches up to him -– reaches
out, grabs his shoulder -– and she turns him toward her -–
toward us -– AND HIS FACE IS A THING OF HORROR: HIS FLESH
LIQUIFYING – FUCKING MELTING – HIS EYES BALLOONED IN UTTER
FEAR –- and the Flight Attendant’s eyes go wide in a
terrifying PRE-SCREAM GASP as Troubled GRABS HER ARM –- and
she SCREAMS BLOODY FUCKING MURDER --"
or
"The Flight Attendant runs past INDIAN MAN -–
WHOSE FACE IS FUCKING MELTING NOW TOO – HE’S LOSING HIS MIND
-– LOOKING AT HIS HANDS – THE FLESH PAINFULLY LIQUIFYING!"
When Olivia (Warren - in the original script) meets Nina for the first time and we all remember how Olivia was not buying Nina`s story or whatever, there`s a sentence "and she (Olivia) doesn`t fucking trust her (Nina)."
So maybe it`s a common practise to put it like that in the script. I wouldn`t do that but someone maybe (and obviously) would. I don`t know. When I see something like that in the script I find it lame and it kinda makes the script cheap or immature or I don`t know how to put it (English is not my native language so excuse me for lack of words :-D)
Holy shit!
ReplyDeleteHe makes such spectacular trailers/promos, maybe he could just... keep doing that.
ReplyDeleteNot to say that this is bad, I know I couldn't do any better, but it just seems like trailers are his true calling.